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The Manor House

prompt by @zeldacroft

“I can’t believe we’re here!” Clara gushed, gazing at the manor house. Its front steps were preceded by carefully-laid stone, centered around a magnificent fountain. Tourists bustled around eagerly with their cameras and visitor pamphlets as the two sisters joined them.

“It says here that tours start every hour in the Grand Gallery,” said Kelly, holding up the guidebook. Clara was too busy admiring the variety of flowers that adorned the area, from the climbing vines near the elegant windows to the lush bushes around the stone path. So Kelly went back to her reading, but with a smile. It was nice to see that the manor was already living up to Clara’s expectations.

After a brief distraction by a duck swimming in the fountain, the sisters quickly made their way inside. As they mounted the marble stairs, Clara’s excitement became tangible, an emanation of joy that merged with the curiosity of the other tourists.


... And my ending starts from here.

The Great Gallery had recently been restored. It was very well lit despite the little light that entered through the windows, thanks to discreet lamps arranged at the edges of the wall, these luminaires had been placed in such a way that it seemed as if they had always been there and were part of the place.

There was the main hall, with the most emblematic works of the manor house and around it, they had arranged the minor works forming a kind of corridors. Landscapes, Portraits, Angels; Beautiful and varied paintings adorned the walls of the Great Gallery.

Clara was excited, she ran from one side to the other looking here and there, she looked like a hummingbird that went from flower to flower trying to decide which one to collect the nectar from. Kelly, on the other hand, carefully contemplated each of the paintings trying not to lose any detail, constantly looking for the reference in the guide to complement his observation.

The two girls met again in one of the corridors, their glances coincided in the portrait of a young man with emerald green eyes and long black hair, he was dressed elegantly and his face sketched a smile full of complicity.

"It's beautiful, don't you think?" asked Clara, her cheeks blushed, she was a little embarrassed after telling Kelly that, but it was too late.

"Yes, I can't deny that he's very handsome," Kelly openly confessed. "But who is he?" asked the girl who needed to know everything.

"Why don't you look in the book," Clara asked, showing interest in the guide for the first time along the way.

A faint breeze caressing her neck made Clara look down the hall, her beautiful blue eyes, completely astonished, couldn't believe what they were seeing. It was the guy in the portrait! He was there smiling, at the end of the hallway, he had his index finger in front of his lips as if signaling her to be silent, he gestured with his hand for her to follow him. Clara approached him with a strange naturalness, driven by a dreamlike confidence emanating from that young man, took her by the hand and carried her with him through the corridors of the Great Gallery.

"I found it!" said Kelly in the middle of the lonely hallway, who, being absorbed in the guide, had not noticed Clara's absence. "Thomas Arterbury, son of Lord Bertrand Arterbury" she continued to read excitedly "He died at the age of 22 in an accident during a riding practice... It's a shame he died so young, don't you think so Clara?"
Kelly looked to one side and the other, but she didn't see Clara anywhere.

The End.

This is my participation for the We-Write #10 from the @freewritehouse. I hope you like it there.

Thank you for reading and do not hesitate to comment.

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Nice job!

It would be interesting to figure out the mechanism of Thomas' appearance in the hall. Did he always appear in this hall or he made an exception for Clara?

Or maybe he shifted the space-time continuum and moved Clara in a different time, before his accident and that's why Kelly didn't see her.

Then again, maybe it was a hired actor by the manor management to enhance more visitors to the manor. Sort of like in this SNL skit

Maybe it was a hired actor by the manor management to enhance more visitors to the manor. Sort of like in this SNL skit
Lol you made my day whit that.

I think that Thomas had already appeared before in the gallery, is a soul in pain and this time he felt an attraction for Clara.

I see. I guess I missed you mentioning about it in the story. Because if other people had seen it before then the manor would have had accompanied gossip and the tour guide would necessarily mentioned about it.

There is a one really old hotel in Hollywood, FL. It's really crappy compared to other new and luxurious resorts. So the management maintains the gossip that there is a ghost that lives there on the seventh floor. I understand them - that's one advertising they don't have to pay for. )))

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How mysterious! I really like your descriptions, like Clara as a hummingbird and the supernatural air around Thomas and his portrait. Let's hope Kelly was able to find Clara before it was too late.

Very pleased that you liked my ending, everything was possible thanks to your promt. I felt you defined the personality of the two girls with very few words and then I just added the mystery.

Thanks, I'm glad you liked it. And congrats on the Curie!

Great! I have so many questions. I love stories that keep me wondering what happens next. Nice capture of the eeriness and mystery that can exist in these places.

Thank you, yes, the old places are full of mystery, I also wonder, What happened to Clara?

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You started on such a positive note so I was surprised that it ended like this. I hope that Clara is just hallucinating and she will be found somewhere in the manor..

I like that you did such a twist to the story. I enjoy being surprised :)

Thank you for sharing and have a lovely day!

hey dear @darthgexe, nice story! I read the other comments and saw everyone worried about Clara ... I honestly thought that this kidnapping of thomas' ghost is very romantic :-)) maybe clara will come back, maybe not, but it was her destiny to meet him and be part of her life / death. yes, gothic and romantic! well done

It's a nice way of looking at the big picture, not always what seems to be wrong is actually what's wrong.

Oh yeah! you're right!
when the ending is open nothing prevents us from imagining anything :-))

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Hello Hello!

I found this part of the story very interesting, I look forward to you writing to find out what is really happening ...

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Hi @darthgexe. I had recently read another continuation of we-write. I loved your surprise ending. Besides, you described Clara and gave her personality that was very good for the story. Congratulations on the narration and the Curie vote. Nice to read you

I liked the way you write.
I really felt being in the story.
Congratulations on the Curie vote!